100 Word Challenge #4 But What If I Was In Charge

My goal is to use more describing words.

I slowly trudged through the ice cold snow with my family going to the train station to go to another town. I didn’t want to go, but my mum forced me to because I had to visit a sick cousin. As I climbed onto the train I wondered ‘But what if I was in charge?’. Soon I found myself at home playing video games with my friends and then I was at the shops buying lots of cards. “Wake Up! We are here” Yelled a voice. I woke up with a start. “Where are we?” I questioned.

One Comment
  1. Nice storey
    I liked how you made it interesting by adding dialogue.
    The only thing you could improve on is by adding more interesting words.
    PS (I like your blog)

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